Tani fukaku sumu ka to omoite towanu ma ni urami o musubu kiku no shitamizu

谷深くすむかと思ひて訪はぬ間に
恨みをむすぶ菊の下水

Roma-ji: Tani fukaku sumu ka to omoite towanu ma ni urami o musubu kiku no shitamizu
English Translation: Thinking you still dwelt
clear and deep within the valley,
I did not come by—
and so resentment's been scooped,
from the stream beneath the mums.
Meaning: Thinking you still lived deep in your clear valley, I did not visit, and in that time I made you scoop up resentment, like water from beneath the chrysanthemums.
Commentary: Miscellaneous Poems 1080

Headnote: "Reply"
This is the reply of the Ajari Kakuken to Saigyō's poem. Thinking you were still living, clear as water, deep in the valleys of Kōya, I did not visit, he apologizes, and in the meantime I let resentment gather in you, as water is scooped from beneath the chrysanthemums.
Taking Saigyō's "the water beneath the chrysanthemums" as his own last line, he answers deftly with water imagery, sumu pivoting on "dwell" and "be clear," musubu on "bind resentment" and "scoop water." The wit of the two poems answers each other. The name Kakuken is given as written in the text.

First line, “tani fukaku”: deep in the valleys of Kōya.
Second line, “sumu ka to omoite”: sumu pivots on "dwell" and "be clear"; the line has an extra syllable.
Third line, “towanu ma ni”: while I did not visit.
Fourth line, “urami o musubu”: musubu pivots on "binding resentment" and "scooping water in the hand."
Fifth line, “kiku no shitamizu”: ending on a noun, taking up the last line of the preceding poem and completing the water imagery with "be clear" and "scoop."
Author: Kakuken Ajari
Source: Sankashu
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