罪はしも露も残らず消えぬらむ
長き夜すがらくゆるおもひに
長き夜すがらくゆるおもひに
- Roma-ji
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Tsumi wa shimo tsuyu mo nokorazu kienuramu nagaki yosugara kuyuru omoi ni
- English Translation
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Of my sins surely
not a dewdrop now remains,
they have vanished all,
through the long night smoldering
in the fire of my remorse
- Meaning
- Surely not a dewdrop of my sins remains, for they have vanished in the smoldering fire of remorse that burned all through the long night.
- Commentary
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Book Eleven Variant Poems 708
Through a fire of remorse smoldering the whole long night, the poet's sins must have vanished without a dewdrop left. Overlaying sins wiped away by repentance with dew that vanishes, the poem joins kuyu, to regret, with kuyu, to smolder, and omoi, thought, with hi, fire.
This poem is found only in a variant manuscript line of the anthology; in the variant order it is placed after 633 in Book Ten. Poem 633 says that both life and sin have been likened to dew, sharing tsumi, tsuyu and kie with this poem.
First line, 'tsumi wa shimo', means as for my sins, the particle shimo adding emphasis. Like tsumi o mo tsuyu ni in the second line of 633 in Book Ten, it sings of sin.
Second line, 'tsuyu mo nokorazu', means not even a dewdrop left, overlaying the sense of fragile dew.
Third line, 'kienuramu', means they must have vanished, the perfective nu with the present conjectural ramu; the poem breaks after the third line. Dew and vanishing are associated words.
Fourth line, 'nagaki yosugara', means all through the long night.
Final line, 'kuyuru omoi ni', means in the smoldering fire of remorse, joining kuyu, to regret, with kuyu, to smolder, and omoi with hi, fire. It is inverted with the lines before.
- Source
- Kinyo Wakashu
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