Sumigama no tanabiku keburi hitosuji ni kokorobosoki wa ōhara no sato

炭竈のたなびく煙ひとすぢに
心細きは大原の里

Roma-ji: Sumigama no tanabiku keburi hitosuji ni kokorobosoki wa ōhara no sato
English Translation: Like the smoke that trails
from the charcoal kilns, a single
thin and rising line,
how forlorn and lonely is
the village of Ōhara.
Meaning: Like the single thread of smoke trailing from the charcoal kilns, how utterly forlorn is the village of Ōhara.
Commentary: Miscellaneous Poems 1210

Headnote continued from the preceding poem: "Reply"
The third of Jakunen's ten. Like a single thread of smoke trailing from the charcoal kilns, how utterly forlorn is the village of Ōhara.
Ōhara was known for charcoal-burning, and Ryōzen's charcoal-kiln poem was echoed in 1047 of this book. Forlornness is laid over the single thin thread of rising smoke; hitosuji ni joins "a single strand" of smoke with "single-mindedly."

First line, “sumigama no”: of the charcoal kilns.
Second line, “tanabiku keburi”: the smoke trailing along.
Third line, “hitosuji ni”: both a single strand of smoke and "utterly."
Fourth line, “kokorobosoki wa”: what is forlorn, echoing the thinness of the smoke.
Fifth line, “ōhara no sato”: ending on a noun, the last line shared by the series.
Author: Jakuzen
Source: Sankashu
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